How I am going to revised my paper

When revising the paper I would have to focus on the topic. My First draft was going from person to person .On my revised draft will concentrated on lyte's commencenment address of 1886. I will re-read the document and take some ideas out of document . Then I would explain how we are benefiting from it and why important today. I will be using the sample paper you gave us to use on the mindmap. I will explain lyte's commencement address of 1886 in detail.

Local & mu history

Local & MU histoy

           I chose this topic conversation because i thought it would be a intersting to learn about millersville university history. I started locating my information from the infromation you gave us. I search all the names you put on the mindmap under local and MU history. I want to explain  E.O lyte's commencement address. the first commencement was a class of eighteen people. Dr. E.O lyte spoke on education out of school. Then he a third annual commencement with five members of the group. I want to als examine Dr. Hull address on the success of tomorow. Dr. hull spoke on his hope of inrcreasing efficiency in mathemtics. Another person I want to examine is Sally E. Bolton. On November 18 ,1855, she address a letter to her mother and aunt. In the lettershe expressher concern about mother and aunt. And she explain what is going on around her.